[navre]

navre on 20060309 um 1114 Uhr #555

It is always a thought provoking experiance when I sit down and wonder which poem I will post here. I’m never quite shure what the deniziens who haunt this place will be receptive to. But, in my short absence I think i will post this one untitled as usual any sugestions as for a title are welcome, thank you and enjoy

These long days are hollow filled.
Restless moments give way to silent nights.
Yet, midnights black echoes with the loudest screams.
Half dreamt thoughts bloom full under the moon’s light.
Despair, finds voice whispered upon the lips of the softest breeze.
To gaze forward gains null, so we judge the past.
Ever growing fields of night lilies sway in the gathering gale.
Blindly we tip toe along the rock way under the pale light.

[necromancerza]

necromancerza on 20060309 um 1144 Uhr #4872

any sugestions as for a title are welcome

Ok … i`ll try my hand at this .
“Acknowledge the Anxious Shadows Feed”
How`s that Navre? only you can comment , because only you know the true depth of your written words.

I’m never quite shure what the deniziens who haunt this place will be receptive to

Your work is good .. and you know exactly what people around here like ..
“This is crap in my opinion“
But then again .. does mine count ? 😈

[navre]

navre on 20060309 um 1313 Uhr #4873

my intent is not that i will be the only person who knows the true depth of my writing my goal is to empart a picture or the view i had when i wrote it to those who read it …in other words to make them see what i saw when i wrote it….when i can achive this in everything I write then i will consider my self a true poet

[necromancerza]

necromancerza on 20060309 um 1355 Uhr #4874

when i can achive this in everything I write then i will consider my self a true poet

Bearing in mind that some people will never see it due to the level of their intelegance and not due to the level of your writing …
Wat i was merely trying to say is that you alone can select the true title to fit the emotion/mindset to which your words were written .

But anyway .. how was my title … 😈

[ashiri]

ashiri on 20060316 um 0055 Uhr #4875

personally i feel it should be best left untiltled. this is odd for me cuz i always title my writing (which all sucks) but this is good w/o a title. again very well written.

[navre]

navre on 20060316 um 1200 Uhr #4876

necro the suggestion is a good atempt i like the meaning but not wuite right ill think if i can rework it ill let you know when i get one and you can tell me what you think