Black Bridge
Zitat von dark_child am 25 Juli, 2006, 2054 UhrBlack Bridge
As I stood on the rail
Looking down at my trail
With my heart pumping
I jumped
It seemed forever my fall
Going into the water like a
cannonball
The current grabbed me a hold
That made me flip and fold
I went left then right
My body screamed at me in fright
It let me go
And be hold
I'm safe as can be
on the bank sitting on my knees
looking at what I can see
What my journey
Has lead me to be
Black Bridge
As I stood on the rail
Looking down at my trail
With my heart pumping
I jumped
It seemed forever my fall
Going into the water like a
cannonball
The current grabbed me a hold
That made me flip and fold
I went left then right
My body screamed at me in fright
It let me go
And be hold
I'm safe as can be
on the bank sitting on my knees
looking at what I can see
What my journey
Has lead me to be
Zitat von valek357 am 25 Juli, 2006, 2328 UhrVery good poem, made me think of the every day life strugles in a new light
:D
Valek
Very good poem, made me think of the every day life strugles in a new light
:D
Valek
Zitat von insidedistuo am 26 Juli, 2006, 1209 Uhrthis poem makes me think of overcoming fears... and realizing that you challanged yourself.. and did it..
good job dark.. :wink:
IO
this poem makes me think of overcoming fears... and realizing that you challanged yourself.. and did it..
good job dark.. :wink:
IO
Zitat von robc666 am 28 Dezember, 2006, 1426 UhrIt's a good poem. It makes me think of failure, like trying something major and failing but the failure, no matter how it may seem at the time, is for the best.
I'm probably way off the mark but it's still a nice poem and well written, good job dark
It's a good poem. It makes me think of failure, like trying something major and failing but the failure, no matter how it may seem at the time, is for the best.
I'm probably way off the mark but it's still a nice poem and well written, good job dark
Zitat von dark_child am 21 Februar, 2007, 2212 UhrThanks and I allow people to intertrupt my writings how they want.
Thanks and I allow people to intertrupt my writings how they want.
Zitat von navre am 22 Februar, 2007, 1625 UhrI'm sure this post ,,, has the potential to enrage a few poeple but so be it those that truly know me realise I have never had any tact.
Of all the poems posted on here by others I do belive this is the first one I have truly liked. Yesm I have a few suggestions but then again who would not and I am by far no expert. Nod to you dark and keep up with the writting.
I'm sure this post ,,, has the potential to enrage a few poeple but so be it those that truly know me realise I have never had any tact.
Of all the poems posted on here by others I do belive this is the first one I have truly liked. Yesm I have a few suggestions but then again who would not and I am by far no expert. Nod to you dark and keep up with the writting.
Zitat von sweetlust am 30 November, 2007, 1211 Uhr*Whispering softly...sadly...*
:( ...Please?.....Don't jump?.....Please...Don't.....hurt...you...?...
:oops: :cry:
*Whispering softly...sadly...*
:( ...Please?.....Don't jump?.....Please...Don't.....hurt...you...?...
:oops: :cry:
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